20 time scene 5, Expelled, now graces my portfolio (I apologize for the late post). The main character is a squire (or knight-in-training) who goes to a “school” to become a knight. The school is headed by Sir Duncan, a knight. However, the kingdom has strong views on people who use magic – they are seen as dangerous, volatile, and unfit to be knighted into the king’s army, which is what the squires train for.
The main character, Nathaniel, uses magic in secret.
This is my last post for my 20 Time project. I’m pleased at how it went.
School’s out now. Theoretically, I won’t be asked to post anymore, but I really like my blog and I’ll probably use the blog section to post writerly things and updates on my story. The portfolio won’t be stocked with so many things, unless I write a really great essay and feel like showing it off.
So what does this all mean?
- More writing advice and story updates
- More focused post topics
- No more mandatory reflections on in-class reading material! Woo hoo!
My latest scene is up, titled A Tale of Two Societies. It’s a break from my previous scenes because the social issue – the split of the social classes – is not the main focus of the piece. It’s two descriptions – one illuminating a ball at the royal palace in full swing, and the other revealing the dirt-poor underbelly of the city slums in the shadow of the palace’s opulence.
This scene fits within my main story, each description in the perspective of one of the two characters who argue in Powder Keg. I used it as a study in effective word choice. Using descriptive words like “diamonds,” “hundreds,” and “finest” give a completely different feel than “crust,” “scraped,” and “arid.”
I am also pleased about my food description in the royal party. If I can make myself hungry while writing, that’s a win in my book.
One more post, and TKAM will be out of my hair. Hurrah!
This was supposed to be done before my “final” post, so this will concern some points from earlier in the book. As I was reading along, I could feel the exponential plot-action graph starting to slowly go up. I kept ambling along through the chapters, knowing (and hoping) it would get better towards the climax. It did, but it still took too long in my opinion.
I was following Scout’s development. I changed my two focus questions from shallow things regarding Dill and Boo into something actually relevant – What caused Scout to act so much like a boy? I unearthed this question when I read a line from when Scout and Jem visit Calpurnia’s church. They hear a lecture, and Scout thinks, “Again… I was confronted with the Impurity of Women Doctrine”. It was such an offhanded comment by Harper Lee, but I think it’s really important regarding my question. If Scout was repeatedly brainwashed, as she alludes to, with the idea that women are impure, she would believe it. And why would she aspire to be something that seems to be looked down upon in society? It seems much easier to just be boyish.
I also made an interesting note further down that same chapter. Scout asks Calpurnia why she dumbs down her language when she’s around her peers, when Scout knows she’s smarter and has better language than that. Calpurnia says, “It’s not necessary to tell all you know. It’s not ladylike.” I think this scene connected back to earlier in the book, when Scout was showing off her literacy in school and got in trouble with her teacher. Scout didn’t understand why she was being scolded, and it made her angry. She knew how to read. Why should she keep that a secret? But we see now that the teacher was trying to make her act more like a lady. This development brought up my second revised question – What is “ladylike”? What defines what a lady does? I have a vague answer, now that I’ve read the whole book – I think ladies in this society are meant to keep secrets. Aunt Alexandra puts on a facade when she goes back into the party, even though she knows Tom died. Calpurnia makes herself sound less educated around her fellow churchgoers. And from there, we see glimpses into their secret lives.
Oh, the secret lives we live…
I’ve uploaded two more scenes onto the Portfolio – #2, Powder Keg, and #3, A Thief’s Commentary.
#3 is set in the same spin-off story as Dangerous Disguise, with the same narrator. It focuses on the social issue of militarism, or the glorification of the army (or in this case, the society’s law enforcement). #2 is part of my main story. It’s a scene that I cut out of the actual manuscript a while back, and I played around with it and edited it. It focuses loosely on the social class split. I discovered it while going through some old documents, and I freshened it up to put on my portfolio.
As always, named have been changed for privacy.
Moving forward, I will continue writing and trying to remember to put things on my portfolio. I’ve gotten back into writing my main story, so I’m hype for that. It’s the end of the Getting Ready era – time to Get Started.
Did I like To Kill A Mockingbird? Yes. I never groaned internally when I had to read more chapters, and I was able to stay engrossed in the story.
Is To Kill A Mockingbird the next Outsiders in my list of favorite books? Definitely not. While the book was alright, I feel like the action increased exponentially from an infinitesimally minuscule amount. The last four or five chapters were great, the court scene kept me on the edge of my seat, but the rest of the book is just a little too flat. I felt like the rest of it was so stuffed full of theme and foreshadowing and social commentary and morals, there wasn’t enough room in the cracks for a decent story. Continue reading “The True Mockingbirds”